Friday, October 29, 2010

Monster Mash Blog-fest Story: Vampire

Blood oozed from the girl’s wound. She was almost dead. If the ambulance arrived in time and if she made it to the hospital, a blood transfusion might save her.

The crowd pressed closer. It had grown since the ambulance sirens alerted the neighbors to the accident. Everyone examined the girl’s car, close at hand. No damage could be seen. The driver’s side door was open. The key still in the ignition caused a repeated dinging sound. The paramedics hurriedly lifted the girl onto the stretcher. A policeman forced the crowd back. Another officer stood next to his patrol car, radio in hand, surveying the crowd.

Half a block away the street light wasn’t working.

A single shadow left unnoticed from a nearby truck. Cell phone in hand, the man, or it might be a woman, impossible to tell in the light, tucked the device inside a pocket. It ran along the dark building. A moment later, the shadow flew into the air and vanished.

The street light flickered, sputtered and turned on to highlight the sign over the building’s door.

Bonfils Blood Center.

My first vampire story. This is part of Monster Mash hosted by Roh Morgon at Musing of a Moonlight Writer. Click to follow here or on the side bar button and check out all the other monster writings. It’s been going on all week so you may need to browse through the blogs to read.

My question is; who called the paramedics to save the girl?


kobico said...

Hmm... middle of the night outside the blood center... the cleaning crew who were coming on duty?

Will Burke said...

The car's open-door dinging was a creepy touch. "Why that?" Not sure, but it added a nice texture to the scene!

The Golden Eagle said...

The vampire, maybe? Perhaps s/he decided that all the blood wasn't worth a human's death.

Great blogfest entry!

Joanne said...

I'll say the vampire too, to stop him/herself from killing the girl, in a roundabout way.

Jules said...

Nice job, the sign was a great touch. Who phoned? I'd say the wino laying to the left of the street light. Mad because someone woke him. :D
Jules @ Trying To Get Over The Rainbow

N. R. Williams said...

Kobico, Will, Golden, Joanne, and Jules. Someone guessed correctly but I won't spoil it for others coming in and reading. I'll give the answer at the end of the day. Hehehehe.

Holly Ruggiero said...

I wanted more!
I go with the vampire too.

Talei said...

I think it was the mysterious Vampire himself who called. Perhaps he liked the girl too much to kill her completely? ;) I'm a romantic like that.

N. R. Williams said...

Holly, it is such a nice complement to say you want more. Thank you.

Talei, you any Holly maybe correct, we will see.

Thanks for leaving a comment.

Anonymous said...

Maybe they're zombie paramedics looking for a free meal.

Stephen Tremp

N. R. Williams said...

LOL Stephen...I never thought of that, but it would be a monstrous circumstance for the victim.

roh morgon said...

The vampire called.

The question is not why did he call after nearly killing her. For me, the larger question is why did he attack someone outside a blood center? And why did he leave evidence of his existence?

Great entry. So glad you brought a vampire to the Monster Mash. Thanks for coming!

Mary said...

The vampire with a cell phone. Nice touch.

N. R. Williams said...

Good questions Roh...why did the vampire attack someone out side a blood center. Perhaps he was drawn there by the scent. Maybe he is an employee. I didn't say anything about the evidence. His attack may have been concealed in some way. Altogether interesting questions.

I'm glad you liked the humor Mary.

Since it is nearly 6 PM here I will let you all know who called. The cell phone was the clue. Yes, a vampire with a conscious. He has to eat but he doesn't have to kill.
Thanks for posting your comments.

Jodi Henry said...

I thought it was the vampire. Good story. I love vampire tales, well not all of them, but we won't get into that right now. Thanks for answering the questions as I am on Pacific Standard Time and it is only quarter to seven in the morning right now and I really wanted to know the answer.


Oh, and my blogfest: are you just not looking for representation right now? Or do you already have representation? If its the latter did you query and snag an agent already? If so, it would be nice to see a query that worked--you could post that...(telling the entrants that it worked and you don't want feedback--just an idea).

Thanks again.

N. R. Williams said...

No, I didn't get an agent. The long and short of it is despite repeated request and interest, everyone came back with, "it won't work for us." Or a similar comment. Everyone said they liked my story. It is a high or epic fantasy. Previous guidelines for this type were between 120,000 and 160,000 words. I am 130,000. Now they want 90,000 words. This is extreme frustration after years of working my tail off trying to meet the posted requirements. The publishing industry isn't taking on many new unpublished authors. Long story short, I am self publishing via the e-publishing now available. But I'm not doing it in a sloppy way. I have hired an editor who I am currently working with and I hired a book illustrated who did a fabulous job.

I'm glad you liked my story.

Summer Ross said...

I think the Vampire did, but if her car wasn't wrecked what happened to her? loss of bloo0d? did the vampire also be the one who hurt and tried to save her at the same time? LOL Interesting.

N. R. Williams said...

Yes, it is a vampire with a conscious. LOL.

J.C. Martin said...

That was short but really cool! Do we have ourselves a vampire with a conscience? ;)

N. R. Williams said...

Yes, a nice twist. Thanks for leaving a comment J.C.

Renee Silvana said...

"Vampire with a conscience," I love it. Much more realistic than a vamp with an endless supply of willing donors.

I agree, the car dinging noise was a nice eerie addition!

N. R. Williams said...

Thank you Renee, I'm glad you enjoyed my first ever vampire story.

MC Rogerson said...

What a great story! I like the way you left gaps for the reader to explore. Looking forward to following your blog. MCR.

Donna Hole said...

Well written for a first try :) Loads of mystery.


N. R. Williams said...

thank you MCR and Donna...I do try to leave questions unanswered for the reader to ponder and answer on their own. It's more fun I think.

Carolyn Abiad said...

I hope the next vampire I run into follows this train of thought. :)

N. R. Williams said... too Carolyn.